Most adults believe that modern children (5-10 years old) behave worse than those in the past. What action parents should take do you think will have the most positive effect on children to help them behave better like respecting and treating others kindly?
1. limit the types of the TV programs and movies they watch
2. spend more time talking with children
3. supervise and monitor children while they are playing with their friends
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Every family with children faces problems about how to educate children in an appropriate way, and different families have different methods. Some parents pay most of their attention to their interpersonal relations or their children’s entertainment such as the movies or television their children watch. However, I think it is more important for parents to focus on their interactions with children, such as communicating with them.
First of all, though limiting the kinds of TV shows and movies children watch and supervising children’s behaviours sometimes keep bad influence away from children, but it also makes the distance between children and parents larger. Children are generally naive and curious, it is hard for them to understand why their parents not allow them to watch what they are interested or play with who they like, and it is possible that they become even more interested in that types of movies and television or just play with those friends secretly, so the limitation might have opposite influence that parents expect.
Furthermore, children between 5 to 10 years old are good at imitation. Thus it is better for parents to behave well in order to provide children a model to learn about. So parents can spend more time on talking with children, at the same time teaching them how to be a good person. What’s more, the more time you communicate with your children, the less time your children watch TV or play video games. For instance, my uncle tells stories and talk with his sons about what makes them happy and what they experience is interesting during the day every day. Not only they have a close relationship, but also his sons learn how to behave well, how to face problems, and how to deal with relationship with others from their talkings.
All in all, I would recommend parents to talk more with their children if they want to teach their children how to behave like treating others patiently and politely.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, well, for instance, i think, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 328.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00609756098 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73844307842 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521341463415 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.5112555264 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.833333333 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.45110844103 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242821845762 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10859688871 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378230515341 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165738515169 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116676503144 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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