Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Visiting museum is the best way to learn about a country.
As we all know, learning is a significant topic while we are traveling in another country. However there are various types of learning for people to choose. Some people think visiting museum is the best approach for us to learn deeply about that country, whereas I do not agree with that.
To begin with, I agree that it is meaningful for people to visit the museums in a way, but from a high school student’s perspective, keep walking and listen to the director is quite tedious. I went to Russia last year, and the tour guide brought us to the Winter Palace. That journey must be one of the most horrible journey that I experienced. I admitted that the sculptures, paintings, decorations, and furniture were splendid and worth watching, while we just roamed with our heavy bags inside the sultry place, hearing the tour guide introduced everything we passed with a loud voice. After all, I learned nothing as I was so tired and had no enthusiasm to memorize anything.
Furthermore, which I would recommend people to experience is to stay in that country for a long time if their schedules permit, perhaps for a month or two month, to communicate with the residents and learn the country’s histories and cultural background through the conversation. For instance, my friend Emily stayed in Poland for three weeks last summer vacation, and she nearly became a Poland’s people. She experienced Poland’s culture and custom everyday, communicated with local people and learned a lot about their history by listening to people there. What I think is the best is that, this kind of learning not only helps people get to know about that country well, but also gives people precious and meaningful experience.
In the aggregation, my opinion is that visiting museum is not the best way for us to learn about a country. If we do want to get to know it, just stay in that country for months, and then we will know everything about that country including many things would never show in the museum.
Comments
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I am not the certain phrase are acceptable for native speakers to fully grasp the gist of my article. For example: learning is a significant topic while we are traveling in another country. (The point that I tried to make is that learning things about about a new country is one of the most important aspect of visiting a country, and I personally do not like trips that leave me nothing but just tickets;physical proof of my short existence at one place during a time). Secondly, I am not sure that "to learn deeply about that country" is an authentic expression in English.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, thus, well, whereas, while, after all, for instance, i think, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84927536232 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76422672377 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56231884058 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.8733200985 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.5 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270492718814 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106231366896 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122948183854 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195087429406 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0870644351161 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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