Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are(not mine)
In the past few years, the issue of whether or not products are shown better than their real quality in the advertisements has received a great deal of attention from people and authorities. Although some may say that different advertisement are realistic; I as well as many others, believe that due to the direct link between companies' profit and the effectiveness of their advertisements, advertisement producers have to convince more people to buy advertised product. So they use many different techniques to demonstrate that product better than what it is.
First of all, an important reason why product seen better in the advertisements than reality is that producers use celebrities in their advertisements. These days, seeing celebrities from different fields like movie stars or professional athletics in advertisements is very common. Most of the psychologists mention that celebrities could have a strong impact on their follower. Thus, presence of celebrities in an advertisement, shows that product better than reality.
Furthermore, another reason for this ideas is that there are a lot of visual effects in advertisements. Producers usually use this technique in advertisements which are directed toward children, because children cannot easily distinguish between reality and fiction. For example, in many toys advertisements on television, the toys are speaking, fighting or even flying, although they are just some dolls. It is often argued that advertisement makers use visual effect especially in this field to show their products better than reality.
Finally, it is occasionally said that products are shown better in advertisements than what they really are because producers exaggerate in their advertisements. Overstating in advertisements could happen in two different way. One is illustrating the problem which advertised product solves more important than usual. For instance, in many advertisements, cleaning an oil stain from a cloth is the worst problem in the everyday life of people. Second is exaggerating in the effectiveness of the product. Washing all of the clothes with just a little amount of washing liquid in advertisements could be an example of this.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that most advertisement make products seen much better than they really are chiefly due to different entertainment techniques that producers use in their advertisements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, may, really, second, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2098.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60962566845 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36229707318 2.67179642975 126% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494652406417 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4817160411 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.555555556 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361747022234 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123863643226 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990653572871 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234871062256 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788348518309 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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