Movies and television strongly influence the way people behave. Do you agree or disagree? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.
Television is a great invention, that changes the people lifestyle and it provides plenty of entertainment and information to the people. In my opinion, it firmly affect the people and their behaviour. I feel this way for the following reasons which I will explore in the subsequent essay.
To begin with, the celebrities which appear in the dramas or movies have huge amount of fan following. People try to imitate them and their personality. The fashion shows provide information about latest fashion and the common fashion trend in a society. People always take these things seriously because they are also a part of society and to look good are their requirement. My friend's experience is a compelling example of this. My friend is a huge fan of Angelina Jolie and she always watch her all type of shows, movies and documentries. In our college prom, my friend wanted to wear the same desginer dress which Angelina wore in the 2016 met gala show. It was expensive than her normal budget but she wore the dress because she wanted to outshine in her class. Therefore, this example elucidate that television greatly impact the way people act.
In addition, some televison shows affect us positively which means it brings a great change in our personality. Some television shows are based on family life which gives us new prespective to see the opportunities and overcome different problems. For instance, my family watch the time show at geo television. This show is all about how a human act differently in discrete situation. We watched this show regularly because it helps us to deal with situation that often happen in our life. We try to follow it as much as it is possible for us so , we could make our life more peaceful and our society a better place. As a result, without a doubt the television and movies directly or indirectly affect the behviour of people.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that television and movies vastly affect the way in which people behave. This is because, some shows provides the information of the fashion trend in a society, and because some shows and movies leave positive impact on the people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86338797814 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68106045144 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505464480874 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.9292919974 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.7619047619 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4285714286 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04761904762 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113829180052 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0424324958793 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505524516751 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0886130030346 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363518817164 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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