Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smartphone, video games for fun and entertainment; playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children's development.
Living in a world fulling of various technology form birth, today’s children usually have fun and relax themselves through computers, cell phones, and video games. They tend to spend as much time as they have on playing games alone. Some experts suggest children should play simpler toys and go outside rather than stay with technology at home. According to my perspective, outdoors activities and substantial toys will definitely benefit children more.
First and foremost, playing toys and attending activities with friends is good for children’s health. They may run, jump and speak aloud when they play outside while staying sediment during the time of using computers or phone. As we all know, children obsess and short-eyesight growingly serious due to the longer time they spend watching TV or playing video games without moving. If they can go out and move with friends, they will gradually be healthy physically. On the other hand, emerging in the natural environment and the company of friends are crucial for the mental development of kids. It may cause mental distort in the future without these two factors in childhood. Thus, for both physical and mental health, children should play outside with friends.
In addition, kids have more opportunities to practice interaction and communication skills when they play with others. It is inevitable to cooperate, negotiate and communicate whey children play with others. In this way, they will know how to interact with others, which is one of the most important features for future development. In contrast, those who like playing technology all alone probably lack an appropriate way to socialize. My distant cousin, James, love video games and are reluctant to go out with friends. The way he talks with people is like a general who commands his soldiers in the virtual world, which makes others uncomfortable. Therefore, kids do need outdoor activities with friends to learn the social skills.
Last but not least, playing numerous devices from a young age, children are easily indulged in those things. According to the survey from Chinese Academy of Social Science, more than 80% of parents worried that their children are so addictive to technology, such as IPad, smartphones and computers, that exert a bad influence on their study. People cannot blame simply children if parents let them depend on this kind of method to relax and have fun at the very beginning. Kids are accustomed to using phones and have no strong ability to self-control. Therefore, it so hard for them to stop playing when they need to study.
In conclusion, children are likely to maintain health and to obtain social skills by playing outside with friends, while they may indulge in technology. Parents ought to help kids to control the time they spend on technology device and encourage them to go outside.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2410.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17167381974 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68989169372 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547210300429 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3652032371 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.64 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.363538815674 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103049882286 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758894130262 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206692327114 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566773590261 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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