Nowadays, people are busy with many things. If you were given a short period of time, what would you choose:
• Learn to play a new sport you never played
• Learn to cook food in a different way
• Learn to do some hand-made work like clothes
In today's modern and sophisticated world, people are busy performing many tasks. In this connection, each one prefers to do specific things during a short period. Although some people believe that they should experience new sports in a given time, many others hold a notion that cooking in various ways is highly beneficial. There is still a third group who concur with the opinion that learning how to create hand-made is a suitable choice to do in a short time. I agree with the first group's idea, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, play new sports help people to concentrate on their daily duties, so it is helpful for them to do it in a given short period. To be more specific, taking part in physical activities is an ideal opportunity for one to escape from stress, leading to performing other tasks in an efficient way. According to my own experience, when I registered in a football team, which was new sports for me, it helps me to cope with my daily challenges at work. Otherwise, I should consume a considerable amount of my energy to deal with my mental pressure distracting me at work rather than solving projects' obstacles. After doing the exercises, I could finish my projects without feeling stress wonderfully.
Second, sports sustain a person's health; thus, it is a great motivation to play them, which are not experienced before in a defined time. To elucidate, nowadays, people are so busy with their lives' crisis, and they do not dedicate time to participate in physical activities, but allocating a short time to them has a significant effect on reducing many dangerous health problems. For example, my grandfather does not suffer from health problems as he has played new sports in a short period; however, my brother who is younger than my grandfather is undertreated because of his diabetes. The doctor said that he could not get rid of his health problems unless he does some exercises even in a short time. Moreover, he mentioned that if he continues his daily life without doing physical activities, he will face a heart attack in the early future.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that playing new sports affects people's lives significantly. Not only does playing sports heighten brain performance, but it also protects one from getting diseases.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'groups'' or 'group's'?
Suggestion: groups'; group's
...in a short time. I agree with the first groups idea, and I will analyze my reasons thr...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ress, leading to performing other tasks in an efficient way. According to my own experience, when I...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...onderfully. Second, sports sustain a persons health; thus, it is a great motivation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, third, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91729323308 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77200686963 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561403508772 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2850763469 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.411764706 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4705882353 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253026199381 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804856664237 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543772357906 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154459427748 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632650335398 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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