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One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.

In today's world life needs more effort in comparison of the past. Personally, I agree with the idea that the parent's should advice there young childern to go and seek for part-time work.There are several reasons to support this opinion
One of the most important result of making youth people works is teaching them how to take the responsablitiy. When a teenager placed in area that force him to deal with particular sitiuation, he will eventually, learn how to make them correctally. For example, when i was 15 years old, I had been working in the libarary next to my home. The other employee was sick that day and he couldn't come to work. Insted, I sell to the cutomers the books, pens, and all the product that they needed. I took the responsability of that. Thus, helping young childern to take the good action to world thire attitiude will increses the chance of avoiding mistakes in their adulthood life.
Another significant reason of why fathers must encorage their youth kids is preparing them to become Financially independant. If a teenager knew how he can control his budget, he has great opprtinouty to live a financial stable life. To illustrate, a child has all the factors that lead him to spend his budget wisely has better chance for high adult quality of life style in comaperison of the once who don't. As a result, the independant in life came with the careful prepration to achive this goal which it may be learn in very erally age.
In addition to the great charactiers of responsability and independantly is the decision makining skills. One of the most curcial skill that person should to develp. For instance, when families try to involve their young kids to make a correct point of view this will lead them to brighter future of thinking. So, if parent start to push their young people to the part - time jobs this will shape their behivour toward good decision.
In conclusion, the modern worlds has a lot of command toward person life. In order to develop people postive maners, I strongly agree to start doing them as eraly as possible.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ldern to go and seek for part-time work.There are several reasons to support this opi...
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...other employee was sick that day and he couldnt come to work. Insted, I sell to the cut...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1709.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73407202216 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61433551027 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581717451524 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1290293452 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9444444444 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0555555556 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265808076732 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061522748242 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529562323649 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125989101588 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039796440931 0.0645574589148 62% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments