The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
People in different generations will have different ways to ascertain the authenticity of any piece of information. By far the most common means of young people to widen their knowledge is to follow their role models, who enjoy their widespread popularity on social media platforms. In the interim, older people who have been through every thick and thin in life tend to merely believe in their own experience. Therefore, I concur with the idea that opinions of famous people are more important to the younger than they are to the older.
First of all, opinions from celebrities have a huge impact on juvenile's notions. Famous entertainers deliberately build their appearance and lifestyle as perfect as possible; therefore, a myriad of young people achieve perfection so that they consider celebrities as their epitome, forming feelings of imitation. As a result, the juvenile are greatly affected by their idols' thoughts and manners. To illustrate, Na Jaemi, a Kpop star who does charity at all times, with .His affectionate heart has spread benevolent acts through the fandom, catalyzing his fans to follow him.
Secondly, seniors are more conservative to absorb any other people's opinions other than theirs because they themselves have sailed through most of the highs and lows in life. For example, my father once listened to the speech of an influencer about start-ups. In the presentation, the speaker uttered a myriad of easy ways to open business. However, my father quickly disputed the claims because he noted that most of the ideas were ambiguous and impractical. Furthermore, seniors possess negative prejudice towards celebrities. Through scandals of celebrities publicized in the newspaper, seniors form a negative belief that famous people are inclined to be spoiled and worse educated. Little do they know that those people are solely tiny parts in a whole huge celebrity community, and there are a multitude of people who transmit positive letters to young people.
In conclusion, it is out of question that young people are more prone to be influenced by reputed entertainers and athletes compared to older people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1799.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26023391813 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83294706448 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587719298246 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2178321434 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.4375 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3781798207 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112849932839 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137741082855 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225488256303 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.059890542359 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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