The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and exam.
Celebrities are one of the most important parts of each society, and their important role is due to their deep influence on people, especially on young people. Some people believe famous people can put a greater influence on young people, and think they cannot have that effect on older people, while others think celebrities can have a deep influence on both young and old people. In my view, famous people can have more and deeper influence on young people and their opinion may even change the opinion of young people. I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First and foremost, older people prefer to go their own way, while young people prefer to obey a well-known person. Older people have lots of experiences and prefer to act based on them. They believe obeying someone, just because he is famous, is crazy and we must decide and find our own opinion based on our personal life and experiences. On the other hand, young people think that famous people can be good leaders and by obeying them, we can get the thing we want. My own life is a compelling example of this point. We all know Elon Musk, CEO and founder of big companies like Tesla and SpaceX, he is a superhero for me and is the person I always wanted to be like him. When I chose him as my role model, my mother said, “it is really good to have a role model, who can show you the path you want to go through, but do not forget that you have your own life and must decide based on your own feelings.” However, I could never agree with my mother, and that is because I always wanted to go the way which my role model went, while my mother prefer to have her own path.
Second, young people, compare to older people, trust famous people more.
When you trust someone with all your hear, you will realize that how much that person can change each aspect of your life, your opinion and even the way you think, and this is exactly because of the effect of celebrities on people, especially young people. To bring an example, I have a teenager brother, who really likes football, and chose David beckham as his goal in life. Each time he watches an interview of him, tries to adapt his own opinion to beckham’s and even try to convince us that the way which his role model thinks is correct and we are all wrong. In my view, this deep effect, which Mr. beckham could have on my brother, is due to this point that my brother trust him in everything and as the result, he can have a deep effect on him, while, he could not have this effect on me or other members of our family, who are all older than my brother.
To cut the long story short, all I want to say is that, the effect of celebrities on youth is plain as day and we cannot cast any doubt on it; but their effect on older people is not that much. Based on all presented reasons, and also by pointing to this issue that older people can think and decide more wisely, I want to conclude that, the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people, and that is my final conviction.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, well, while, such as, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 89.0 43.0788530466 207% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2557.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 580.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40862068966 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25136436372 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396551724138 0.524837075471 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 790.2 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.2698549673 48.9658058833 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.055555556 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2222222222 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229565366712 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0970574829947 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116673963806 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194677161718 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118161755977 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.89 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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