in order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.

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in order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.

as people regard moneitery responsibility as an essential part of their lives more and more, which breeding the chinldren responsible become a controversible issue among the families. in this regard, some people suggest that chlidren must learn to control their money at earlier age, while others have opposite view, and say they must experience freedom and not limitiation in this regard. as far as I am concerned, the former point carrier more weight because not only would chlidren become more succed in their future, but also they can learn different lessons that will befefit for probably difficult situatons.// I will try to exmine below the specific reasons for this regard which I think are the most common view point nowadays.

the first reason should be stated here is that succes, significan reason for this regard. as a role, succes is an objective rather than subjective . in my view, succes is the ability to do whatever one wants to do and to be satisfied with oneself. on the contrary, there is hardly thing that can be done without a certain amount of money.therefore, presons how know to manage their money resources are accually successful persons. finally, breeding the chlidren who know how consume money in straightforward way is enevitable part of today’s family.

another subtle point should be deserves some words is that there are more vaguely situations that indivituals force to confront with.in fact, through our entire life, there are numerous difficulties and troublesome situations that we have to cope with. so, the lessons and technical advice from our parents make alot differences. how? small example may give some light to this point, once in studied in college, nearly three years ago, I were working in resturant, but why?, because I strongly believe that, I must made money and did not rely on my father, this veiw was developed in the childhood by my family and especially by my father.

However, as many family confess, it usually is hard and take long time to learn chlidren managing their money, but I say, a competent teacher is the key to this problem. beside teaching konwledge, teacher can equipe his/her students with insightful view over negetive aspects of donot well managing money in the entire livivg condition, and rewarding experience to overcoming difficulties related to this responsibility.

in conclusion, taking into account, parents should be consider financial responsibility in breeding their children as first prioritiy. although chlidren may suffering some sorts of pressure, success, cope with diffidulties in positive way,and so forth are great advantages of this point.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in my view, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2249.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.279342723 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81254789455 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598591549296 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.5971132387 48.9658058833 167% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.933333333 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.86666666667 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193658573074 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619061479082 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613370536753 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102402919047 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421089672981 0.0645574589148 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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