In order to stay healthy, many people choose to exercise. Some people tend to exercise individually such as running and riding bicycles, etc. Some people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. Which one do you prefer and why?
Since the dawn of civilization, human beings would always like to be healthier and in a good shape, but the progression of technologies cause hectic life and people do not care about their health. Some people believe that to be healthy, they should choose exercise and tend to work out individually such as running and riding bicycles, while other people tend to participate in group exercises such as team sports. I firmly believe that participating in group exercise is more effective and cause a healthier life style. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons and examples justifying my viewpoint.
The first exquisite reason coming to mind here is that exercising in group can be a motivator element and enhances inducement to follow your goal. For example, 2 years ago I gained some more weights and decided to lose all of them. First I begun to exercise alone. After a short time, I gave up. Then I enrolled in a gym and there was a nice place and full of people who were healthy and tried to be fit. When I saw them, I increased my effort and finally I could lose all of my excessive weights.
Another reason to be mentioned here is that when you choose to attend in a team, you will enter to a new place and you can make new friends and it seems that you can socialize with other people effectively. The results of a recent study have been done in my county, showed that the rate of life expectancy in elderly people aged 55-85, who attended in a gym and done a light exercise, surprisingly increased in comparison with elderly people who didn’t attend in a gym.
To wrap it up, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that working out in team groups especially in a team can have the positive effects in addition to healthy life style. It is strongly recommended that with respect to the hectic life these days, everybody should attend to a regular work out in the gym.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'began'?
Suggestion: began
...nd decided to lose all of them. First I begun to exercise alone. After a short time, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, so, then, while, for example, in addition, such as, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64265129683 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69843449456 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527377521614 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.5200700525 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.071428571 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303042742787 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910920584126 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148564610882 0.0737576698707 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165182037329 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136171032362 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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