A parent wants to help his or her child become better at a skill such as playing a musical instrument or competing in a sport. Some people believe that the best way to do so is for the parent to require the child to practice every day for a set number of minutes or hours. Other people believe that it is best for the parent to encourage the child to practice only as much as the child wishes, with no requirement about the amount of time spent practicing. Which view do you agree with and why?
It is no doubt that parents play an indisputable role in the success of their children. A controversial question occupying the mind is that how a parent can help her child become better at a skill. Some people might be inclined toward the opinion that the best way is for them to encourage the child to practice only as much as the child wishes. I, nonetheless, believe that the parent had better require the child to practice every day for a definite time. In the following paragraphs, some conspicuous reasons will cogently substantiate my perspective.
The main reason is that by necessitating the child to do a specific work, the child will grow as an organized person. After a while, this behavior will be a part of the child's characteristics and child will have converted to a well-organized person. Consider an experience of mine as an example. When I was a 8 year-old child, we lived near the Caspian sea. My mother, who really cared about learning swimming, required me to practice every day for 2 hours. One year later, not only did I convert to a great swimmer, but also I learn how it is important to practice regularly to achieve success in other fields. Therefore, by setting consistent and reasonable plans I could get good grades in my educational life as well. Such experience in my life taught me the importance of being a well-organized person which by effort and perseverance would be able to make my dreams come true.
Another equally noteworthy point in supporting my opinion is that since children are not mature enough to consider the consequences of a decision, it seems that they will not be who can take such decisions for their future. In other word, they do not have enough experience to be able to set plans to reach a certain goal in their future lives without the parent's help. They live in the present and the only thing they want is to be happy through playing with friends, watching cartoons and things like that. They often will not think about the regular planning to reach a goal in the next years. Although children are clever creatures, they often do not the insight about future. They do not understand by their own that being accomplished in every skill is time-consuming and needs to regular plan and practice. According to a research carried out recently in the United Kingdom, children think the time does not go by and they usually will be occupied with their games and imaginations. So, it is parent's duty to show the child the right manner which the child should do accordingly so that he can be successful in different skills, such as playing instrument, dancing and so forth.
In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I have come to believe that it would be far better for parents to require the child to practice every day if they want to be successful in a certain skill. As a matter of fact, there are some other reasons that can be invoked to support my point of view, but let's suffice to this.
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Suggestion: to swim
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Suggestion: will usually be
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
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...nvoked to support my point of view, but lets suffice to this.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, nonetheless, really, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2449.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66476190476 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74458014665 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491428571429 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 753.3 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.222713544 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.47826087 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8260869565 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342412215018 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101381217323 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110153015096 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25059759339 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132068869567 0.0645574589148 205% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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