Parents should limit the amount of time that children are allowed to use electronic
devices, like phones, tablets, and computers.
Most parents nowadays are excessively worried about their children. They try to do their best for their children so that the children reach adulthood without having to deal with any troubling habit or mental condition. Some moms and dads think that when their kids spend a large amount of time with electronic devices, this could affect them negatively on the long run. Hence, the idea of limiting the time that their young spend on the computer or smart phone appears plausible. However, I believe that this is not the right way to solve the problem for many reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, children might miss out on many benefits if they were kept away from electronic devices. Smart phones and other modern devices are leading the technological revolution now. Mobile applications plays a tremendous role in our daily life whether people use it for learning new skills, keeping in shape with exercise or enjoying intellectually stimulating games. As a result, young people can have a huge positive return from these devices and the role of adults is just to incentivize children to use them in a good way. For example, allowing kids to spend time with interactive learning applications is a great way to expand their knowledge and understanding. To elaborate more, I remember my nephew when he was a kid and his dad bought him a smart phone. He was very interested in this application which allowed him to play any musical instrument he wanted with a magnificent simulation to reality. This gave him a chance to discover his passion for music and how he was gifted by a musical ear. Later, his dad hired at-home guitar tutor for him to improve his performance. This was just one instance to demonstrate how detrimental it could be to let our children avoid these new technology out of meaningless fear.
Moreover, enforcing rules on our children is generally not recommended, especially that no scientific studies have shown yet that electronic devices are harmful in any way. Some activities such as smoking have been scientifically proven disastrous on the health of young people. As for these kinds of activities, limitations and rules are the right direction to go for children because they will understand why these measures were taken when they grow up. In addition, humans are always keen on the forbidden. In other words, children will try to evade the rules that we put which they do not find convincing. For example, when I was a kid, I was really interested in playing video games. I asked my dad to buy me a video game device. Out of misunderstanding that this could hold me back from achieving satisfying grades in school, he refused. Consequently, I ended up going to video game store to feed my obsession with video games. In my opinion, more unrealistic regulations lead to the opposite effect on children with respect to something they apparently like.
In conclusion, the best approach to deal with new technologies in the hands of young people is to encourage them to use it properly for developing their skills and unearthing their potential. One last word, having too many strict rules will never guarantee a certain behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 215, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ome activities such as smoking have been scientifically proven disastrous on the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, so, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2660.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93506493506 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79151305159 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534322820037 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 829.8 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6975534208 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5185185185 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.962962963 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117002537795 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030871665637 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329016632353 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070159080606 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348179272328 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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