Parents should limit the amount of time that children are allowed to use electronic
devices, like phones, tablets, and computers.
The question being asked is if parents should limit the amount of time their children spend using devices.
This is a very important question because it has to do with children’s health and futures. In my opinion, I
believe that parents should limit the time their children spend on devices because there are health risks and
it is possible for the children not to be able to communicate well.
The first reason I believe that parents should limit their children’s use of electronic devices is because
studies have shown that using devices a lot can be not healthy. For example, when children get focused on
looking at the screen, they don’t pay attention to the scene around them. They don’t see other people walking nearby or they don’t see cars coming. There are stories in the news every day about children who are in
accidents because they pay attention to the phone instead.
Moreover, it can be that children do not learn to interact with each other when they spend so much time
looking at electronic devices. If they spend all their time looking at devices, they don’t have opportunity to
talk to other children or other adults. So they don’t learn to be polite or to say pleasantries. Yesterday
when I was walking into a store a girl was on her device the whole time and almost walked in to me. She did
not see how close she came to me, and therefore she also did not apologize for almost walking in to me.
Lastly, I believe that the signal from wireless devices like WiFi and cellular signals can help cause cancer.
Some studies show that there is relationship, and if I was a parent I wouldn’t want to take any chances.
In conclusion, I believe parents should limit the amount of time their children spend looking at electronic
devices. There are too many bad possibilities from using them too much.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, lastly, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92546583851 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6186662461 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468944099379 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2664194219 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.125 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.53405017921 375% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230239964125 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924213772595 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108864521316 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0973077896654 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112472792826 0.0645574589148 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.79 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.