Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents should limit the amount of time that children are allowed to use electronic devices, like phones, tablets, and computers.
Use examples and reasons to support your position.
The technology progress is tremendous and it become more and more easier and handy. Because of that, we can see a technological device in a hand of five years child and he knows how to use it. This raise a question, should parents limit the amount of time that their children spend on these devices? In my point of view, I believe parents should control the amount of time spent by their children on electronics devices such as phones, tablets, TVs for three reasons.
Spending too much time of electronics devices without interacting with the real world may lead to antisocialism or in worst case autism. For a kid who don’t interact with the real world too much and stick to artificial worlds more will not know how to interact with the society or he will not know how to merge in the community when he grows up, and needs to depend on himself.
Further, many studies show that electromagnetic waves coming out of the screen and other signals coming out of electronics devices such as WIFI and Bluetooth are very harmful for the human body. To illustrate, the radiations coming out of the electronics’ screen may damage the human eyes. This effect may not be obvious at regular usage of the devices, but it can be noticeable when it overused particularly by children who are still growing.
Moreover, limiting the amount of time of using technological device can make the children more productive. For example, when parents limit their children usage for electronics and guide him to read books or play some sports that will increase his knowledge and create some hobbies that will definitely help him to keep a healthy body and a healthy brain while growing.
Eventually, I feel that reducing the amount spent by kids on devices such as phones and tablets will be the most suitable choice for their own good. I believe that because this will not allow them to limit themselves to a small world in a rectangular box.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 46, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...echnology progress is tremendous and it become more and more easier and handy. Because...
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Line 1, column 62, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ss is tremendous and it become more and more easier and handy. Because of that, we can see ...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the worst'.
Suggestion: in the worst
...real world may lead to antisocialism or in worst case autism. For a kid who don’t intera...
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Line 9, column 257, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to a small world in a rectangular box.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, still, while, for example, i feel, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76488095238 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61690760785 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0989669481 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.153846154 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8461538462 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218820399832 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875176170348 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743128809451 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120194056685 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639874404636 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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