Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
Some people think that it is better for teenagers to stay with their parents for a long time before becoming independent. They cite irresponsibility and immaturity of teenagers at this age as reasons for them to stay under their parents’ wings for longer time. However, I believe that a teenager should leave family nest and become independent sooner not later for three reasons.
Firstly, a teenager lived his life under the caring of his parents without any difficulties, but that isn’t a well simulation of what really happen in life. For instance, the life is harsh, and there are a lot of fighting and competing, and it is empty from the love and caring he used to get from his parents. That is, it will be hard for a person at an older age to compete in this life and cease opportunities when he used to get the support from his family all the time without doing any individual actions. Hence, getting integrated with the real life at a younger age is more efficient to adapt and learn without depending on others.
Secondly, entering the real life as soon as possible will widen the teenager gaze and provide him with more experience and some wisdom. To illustrate, an experience in anything require a lot of time to build up, and for some to get the real experience from life, he must be independent and have enough time to gain this experience.
Lastly, an independent person is more likely to take risks. For example, a person who lives with his family will be hesitated to take any risky opportunities and may be afraid of getting judged by his parents. While, an independent person will not has that fear of getting judged by others for any actions he does or any uncertain opportunities he ceases.
To conclude, living with the family for longer time after becoming an adult is not really that bad if you know what to do. However, I still believe independency is very important to sculpt someone’s personality and to learn from the school of life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'have'?
Suggestion: have
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Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70893371758 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66484759135 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495677233429 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0674172205 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.714285714 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7857142857 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259818357911 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992111003794 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683459596154 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153354652349 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539679014822 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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