Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents should limit the amount of time that children are allowed to use electronic devices like phones, tablets and computers.
Use examples and reasons to support your position.
It is critically important to limit the amount of time that children are allowed to use electronic gadgets as most parents wish to. Personally, I agree with the given statement. I think that limiting children on electronic gadgets can utilize their ample amount of time on other activities like physical development and study purpose. I feel this way for reasons which I will examine in this essay.
First of all, nowadays most children are addicted to online platforms like playing video games, watching YouTube, and other social apps. Obviously, they give less amount of time to physical activities like walking, running, and exercising. In other words, it leads to obesity from a very young age and they will suffer from various types of mental and physical problems like depression and eye sightedness. Consequently, it will create a hazardous situation in their physical and mental life. This is best demonstrated by my personal experience. My nephew is addicted to pubg games since three years of age. He plays PUBG all the time. Although, his parents suggest him not to play these types of games, but he ignores their voices. Recently, he has been diagnosed with long eye sightedness. As a result, he has to wear glasses all the time and has a power of +2. If he had listened to his parent's voice of not playing the online games, he would not have suffered from long eye sightedness.
Secondly, overutilization of electronic gadgets leads to less focus on study mostly by children. Evidently, most of the children forget to do their homework and give less value to their studies. In short, they ruin their grades and their future. But, overuse of electronic gadgets hampers their mind negatively as they are influenced by the negative contents of social media like crime, drugs, and other vulgar content. Hence, the over-allowing of electronic devices hamper the children's academic scores. For instance, nowadays, children are more attracted to social media platforms than before. They generally give preference to the contents in social media rather than real-life conversation. Similar problems have been seen in student study plan as they give less focus in their classes and their participation in class projects. If it is not checked in time, it will ruin student life and their academic performance.
In conclusion, parents should limit allowing their children to use electronic gadgets. This is because it will ruin their physical development and because it will hamper their academic qualifications.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in short, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14634146341 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76538043872 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492682926829 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4372058078 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1538461538 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7692307692 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26923076923 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193485000186 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631657135689 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842716073635 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151795955893 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0937930545136 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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