In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
In this modernized world, which progresses every day. educating children plays a significant role in Society’s success. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that educating children is more difficult today compared to the past because of the presence of technology. However, others stand at the other side of the view and state that children are taught easier today. In my view, as far as I am concern, I concur with the former group. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, educating children is more difficult nowadays in comparison to the past because children’s concentration is distracted by technology, which has widely flourished. it is no secret to anyone that educating is a fundamental issue that concentration plays a vital role in this area. hence, having concentration is crucial to put educating in the right way. accordingly, social media and various applications that children use them, negatively affect their brain and their concentration. also, if they are allowed to bring mobile devices with them to the school, their concentration would be more distracted. therefore, children who have used a wide spectrum of applications and up-to-date devices, which disturb them, can not learn their lessons positively since educating is a matter that needs concentration. As an illustration, when I was at high school, I did not use a mobile device and social media so I could concentrate on my lessons at school; hence, I used to get good grades at school. when I was accepted to the university my grades, on the other hand, were disappointing in comparison to my high school’s grades. Searching for the reasons, I have realized that technology has affected my brain and as a result, I could not pay attention to the professors. if I had paid more attention to my lessons, I would definitely have Gotten better scores.
Furthermore, although technology can be useful in educating children, it is more wasteful of time in regard to children. it is crystal clear that young people spend more time on social media and online games that ordinary should spend. for learning correctly, students should practise their lessons and solve their homework at home and during their free time. Undeniably, children prefer to waste their free time on the internet and especially on social media. accordingly, they like to speak with their friends in social media instead of practising their lessons. therefore, they would not completely learn what they having been taught at school. To put it in the more vivid picture, when I compare myself to my nephew, there is a huge gap between the ways that free time is spent. he spends the most part of his free time on the internet and social media. His grades at school are dramatically low. The answer to this disappointing situation in his grade is clear, that he does not correctly practise his homework and obviously his lessons are not as exciting as his cell phone. As a result, absolutely it is better for him to spent his free time on his lessons, which can be significant for his success in the future.
In conclusion, having all the examples and reasons into account, I believe that educating children in this modernized world with the abundance of technology and gadgets is harder than it used to be in the past. Not only do new equipment disturbs their concentration but also it is wasteful of time in the regard of children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, in regard to, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2889.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 580.0 407.700716846 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98103448276 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89152838223 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458620689655 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 894.6 618.680645161 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0969098489 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6206896552 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.44827586207 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115929857913 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0338792409046 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435159575482 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.068722401452 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209788076967 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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