In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them;
today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not previous generations were more dependent on their parents for making decision compares to the new generations has received a great deal of attention from parents and psychologists. Although some may say that in this era children are more dependent on their parents rather than the previous generation because of a hectic lifestyle; I, as well as many others, believe that young people are less dependent on their parents for making decisions for the future because they have enough source and knowledge for their determinations.
First of all, an important reason why juveniles are independent for making a decision is that the lifestyle is far different from previous generations. In the past, children were dependent on their fathers and mothers. Young boys helped father in farmland or helped them for bringing up their domestic animals such as cows or ships. Also, the young girls had been helped mother for doing home activities like cooking food, cooking bread, cleaning home and many other activities like that, so these children had followed their parents' lifestyle, and they had listened to them when parents decided for them.
Another reason for this point of view is that children’s awareness is increased by growing high technology in this age. By introducing high technology such as word wide web, electronic device, smartphones and many other items to human life, the information of people is increased. They can not only find adequate information from the internet but also compare the different source of information so that they would make decisions easier than past. Furthermore, children, who growing up in the high technology era, spend a lot of time at school, and in school, they not only learn lessons but also learn how to decide the best ways for the future. However, the previous generation did not go to school or university, and they had not been learning how to become independent, so their parents made the decision for them.
Finally, it is occasionally said that young people have learned to multi-task in this time. Many experts believe that in order to have many information sources, children are able to follow their aim so that they can learn many skills as a profession. For example, if a child wants to learn graphic, he would download many films from the internet, and starting to learn the skill without considering parents opinion. Also, they can watch videos from YouTube to better learn this skill. Finally, he will become a flourishing graphic designer in future.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that parents had more influence on children’s lives in the past than now chiefly due to the advancement of technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 35, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not previous generations were more dependen...
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Line 9, column 541, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...l become a flourishing graphic designer in future. In conclusion, considering the idea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2334.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11842105263 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72233489192 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.3793291844 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.294117647 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8235294118 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326175758832 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103398229768 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848190588808 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182322851696 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113881552845 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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