In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, many young people appeal their parents to give them more freedom since they want to charge their own lives. There is a widespread belief that today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. In my opinion, it is proper to say so.
Firstly, modern society are less strict to young people. As the society has developed for decades, people's mind have change a lot.In this case, modern people are more tolerant and open.Parents are willing to see their child to liberate their nature.This argument will serve me better if we consider the example of me and my grandparent Amy.Amy told me, in the past, she should be careful about her behavior all the time, because there are a lot of unwritten rules to limit her social life. Such as young people are not allowed to stay late outside home after 10pm, if they did, old people and society may regard them as naughty child even prodigal sons. At that time, there were a lot of stereotypes of good children, they must be polite ,obedient, and decorous. Otherwise they need to go through people's mocks and contempt. My grandma Amy, has been enthusiastic about forensic science, which was scorned and thought dirty subject. Her parents strongly opposed her to learn this subject, they believed work with dead people was dirty and indecorous.Even her friends, after hearing about her willing, came to persuade her to change her mind. It was a hard time for her to tolerate so much mock and scorn and because she can't bear the pressure from her parents, she changed her major to nurse. In the contrast, today there are less scorn about one's major.Under influence of my grandma, i have been interest about forensic science since i was a child. In my parents mind, my pleasure come in the first place. My friends also support me to do so, they think it is a cool specialty. And also, in modern society, young people can hang out and spent happy time with friends at night. Young people can do a lot thing which were considered indecorous before, such as dancing in the clubs and singing popular music at the agora. So you can see, with tolerant society and parents, people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Besides, younger people are more independent than before. They are more willing to charge their own life than hand it to parents. As you know, modern education are prone to cultivate child's ability to think independently. In school, teacher prefer to let students find a topic and do research by themselves than give homework with solid answers. Take my cousin Jim who is senior student in Hua yang middle school, as an example, he has finished 3 projects by his own work this semester. Jim has a clear plan about his future: studying electrical engineering in the university then try to become a high level electrical engineer. And the whole society are welcome to independent people.According to a survey conducted by professor Green of Peking University, more than 70% HR regard independency as one of the most important factors to evaluate interviewers. 90% of them are willing to give offer to student who had done major projects by himself and have own comprehension about their major. In these cases, younger people today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Therefore, In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them, and since younger people are more independent and society are less strict to them, today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, such as, you know, in my opinion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 52.1666666667 173% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2953.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 616.0 407.700716846 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79383116883 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47996217901 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487012987013 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 925.2 618.680645161 150% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.725513318 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.37037037 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8148148148 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40740740741 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430566977465 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128563468527 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.186764658155 0.0737576698707 253% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.404939691271 0.150856017488 268% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.198800558544 0.0645574589148 308% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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