People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
traveling is one of the biggest passionate of human beings and nowadays, because of progress in transportation systems, people easily take a trip than decades ago. when it comes to choosing between domestic traveling and foreign travel some controversy arises. some people believe that if people travel in their own countries, it will be more beneficial for them; However, some have an opposite idea and I concur with the latter side. In the ensuing lines, I will explain two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
First, foreign travel is a gate to new experiences. when people travel to other countries they have a chance to get accustomed to new cultures and languages. they can observe differences among countries which can affect their lifestyle. Besides, people can see different landscapes, monuments, and museum which reflect the countries culture and history. Understanding cultural differences enable people to respect people with different ways of thinking and living which can make people of various countries closer. For instance, when I was 17 we took a family trip to Istanbul in Turkey. As turkey is a developing county I used to think it is a backward country with no special features but when I visited there I saw some issues which changed my opinion. one of the most important ones was how much they care about energy and water saving which is unimportant in my country. Moreover, I get familiar with some different people and talked to them and I found many Turkish people are well-educated.
Second, foreign travels enable people to leave their comfort zone and be riskier. Needless to say that, a foreign trip is extremely challenging because of new culture and language so people afraid to get in trouble when they are abroad. so risky are these challenges for some people that they prefer do not go anywhere. By traveling abroad people overcome their fears and make an exceptional experience which teaches them to be riskier in a different situation which is essential for all people. take my friend Lili as an example, when we were senior students at university we were going to a conference in Paris but she was frightened because she had never been overseas before and she did not know French; I tried hard and convinced her to come with me. she had an incredible time in Paris and after it, she started traveling overseas even alone and once she told how much thankful she is that I persuaded her for the travel.
In conclusion, Based on the aforementioned explanations and examples, I believe foreign travels are more beneficial for people because they can gain new and precious experience, also, they can leave their comfort zone and be riskier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2234.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96444444444 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73597343139 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524444444444 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0230274975 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.7 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277028103912 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0968154867565 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752888710309 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189362641663 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599271226349 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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