people benefits from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries
No one can deny that traveling as a general term regardless if it is inside or outside the country will add to your knowledge and experience. some people may prefer to stay inside the country while others are interested in discovering the other side of the world. From my perspective, the opponent idea looks rational and in the following article, I will elaborate my point of view cogently.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that when we travel outside the country, we may increase our opportunity to learn and discover new cultures and rituals. To take a personal experience as an example, since I was 10 years old, my passion was to visit India and discover their culture including food, colors, sarri, and dance. Finally, In 2009, my wish came true and I went to India on my honeymoon with my lovely partner and I discovered all those wonderful aspects of India. I found that they are a happy country even if they may have some problems and difficulties in their life. They are talented and hard-working people, even if they do not have the facilities to improve themselves, but you can notice that they are planning to achieve their goals. These kinds of information you can not know it through a book or an article, you may have to be involved with them to discover it.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that when we travel outside our country that means we will be mixed with different communities. As a result of this mixture, we will accept and respect others even if they are different in colors, religion, habits, and so on. Hopefully, this will lead to end the conflict between people and countries by learning how to accept others as human beings. I can mention my experience as a good example to illustrate this point when I arrived in the United State. I found everything is different from my hometown in the middle east, I was afraid that I may have some problems because I am different in language, religion, and habits. But, after five years of living in the United States, I can tell that they are a kind and respectful community. They accept others even if they are different and support them to be a successful citizens.
To wrap it up, all the after-mentioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that, traveling in both destinations if it is inside or outside is important and worthy. But, traveling outside the country will return in more benefits than inside since we can learn about our history or our country through schools, friends, and, parents. On the other hand, outside traveling will support the mixture between communities to accept each other as well as it will increase our knowledge of variable cultures.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, so, well, while, as to, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2230.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76495726496 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68542737729 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478632478632 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.3458077855 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 117.368421053 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6315789474 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192684335387 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590220922856 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591494266276 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133826549777 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528031045158 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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