People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university?
new experiences
career preparation
increased knowledge
Use specific details and examples in your answer
Advanced education is a pool of new experience, career preparation, and it also enhances our knowledge. However, many people argue that we can gain new experience through travel, during different jobs, or even communicating with people as well. they hold the view that we can also increase our knowledge of surfing on the internet, reading books, magazines, and also watching educational programs on TV. Personally, I believe that attending university or college is a unique level of our life that we could be prepared for our future career. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most conspicuous reasons, justifying my point of view.
First of all, these days, due to the complexity of the modern era, every job needs professional experts who are aware of every aspect of their work. Every work has its equipment, software, approaches, and facilities that without information about how they work or how we can get the best profits from them, we will completely fail to do our jobs. So universities have served as an imperative place to learn all things about our career. For instance, nowadays, there are various jobs such as software engineering, pilot, or so on. When my mother wanted to attend the university her father was conventional and he was completely opposed to her idea. Since he thought she could gain the skill during her works, my mother could only find a job as a babysitter. All better jobs need skill and advanced education that my mother didn’t have. My example illustrates my opinion.
Second, in this competitive world, we need advanced education to get a promotion. Many companies require several qualities and certificates to give promotions. Sometimes we have the proper skills and information about our career but companies have some standards and charts for hierarchy systems. I remember when I worked for a construction company, I just had a bachelor’s degree in civil engineer, I wanted to cooperate through a big project. I had a lot of experience and really had a lot of data about the project. However, they didn’t accept me as a senior manager because it requires a master degree. As a result, I lost this position.
Consequently, as far as I am concerned, the most important reason to take part in universities is career preparation. Because jobs need skills and knowledge that only we can obtain from university and because some companies have several rules and standards to give promotion that one of them is a degree from universities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...even communicating with people as well. they hold the view that we can also increase...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, really, second, so, well, for instance, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02403846154 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92857529431 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550480769231 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2202699614 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.40909090909 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211573047441 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579285862841 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497604515095 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124714392691 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320205081274 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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