People have a lot of opinions about the value of advanced education. Which do you think is the most important reason to attend college or university? Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
new experiences
career preparation
increased knowledge
Use specific details and examples in your answer.
Throughout the history of humankind, people invariably scrutinized the significance of attending either college or university, and the proponents of the view that university is fundamental have presented manifold reasons for upholding their idea. From my point of view, enrolling in university, as well as collge, has an array of boons, yet career preparation is the most important advanatge of it. I hold this stance for three core arguments, which are elucidated below.
To begin with, it is not feasible to acquire knowledge concerning specific faculty from anywhere else than university. In other words, so as to have sufficient knowledge regarding a career, one has to attend college or university. A lucid example that sheds the spotlight on this thesis is my cousin’s personal experience; he was invariably accentuating that university is trivial, and without going to a particular institution, it is possible to have a decent career. Thus, he didn't enroll in any university. However, as the time passed, he encountered a myriad of problems about finding a occupation; employers were either demanding a college diploma or examining my cousin by asking several questions. Besides to not having any diploma, my cousin was also not prepared to answer questions concerning his desired career, so he eventually, couldn't find a job, and confessed that his opinion about university is flawed. As it is obvious from the aforementioned experience, a vast majority of people deem university a place where one prepares for his or her future career. Moreover, the knowledge given in the high school is not sufficient for qualifying in a particular field for schools concentrate on all academic subjcets, and exclusively their theoritical side. On the other hand, in the university one chooses a certain field, and commence on attaining knowledge only regarding it, which, in turn, establishes the foundation of his or her career preparation.
In addition, not only does university impart one essential information concerning one’s faculty, but it also teaches practical side of a specific profession by sending to volunteering, not to mention creating artificial environment for students in order to render them to feel as if they embarked on working. A compelling example of this thesis is a univeristy nearby my accommodation; the institution offers various volunteering seminars, send students to particular companies to make them work, and so forth. All of these factors enable students to prepare for their desired field, not to mention implement the knowledge they obtained in the classess. Furthermore, according to a research conducted by an esteemed university, it became evident that a vast majority of people claim that the majority of tasks they accomplish in their jobs currently, are akin to the ones they were assigned in the university. Consequently, university is vital for preparing for a career both theoretically and practically.
In light of thoughts elaborated upon, I would like to conclude that attending the university entails a plethora of boons, and it is beyond doubt that preparing for a specific field is the most substantial one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, well, as to, in addition, as well as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2676.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3627254509 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16790123751 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527054108216 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 867.6 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.357358017 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.666666667 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7222222222 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.83333333333 5.45110844103 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126760602791 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414109176388 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039369758155 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.084730531853 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417780238017 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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