People learn better from those at their own level—such as teachers or supervisors—then from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors
Questions surrounding who people’s best teachers are have been ongoing in the recent years, especially after the development of technology. In fact, young people seem more comfortable learning from their fellow students or colleagues than from older people since they share the same interests. While some people believe that co-workers and friends make people learn better, others believe that learning from teachers or supervisors is more effective and helpful. In my opinion, people learn concept and gain expertise better from older people than from fellow colleagues. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, older people are the best teachers since they are positive role-model for younger people. In fact, they can give them some advice and teach them what is wrong and what is right. Besides, their life lessons make the youngsters reflect upon their mistakes: in this way, they become more mature and take the responsibility for their own life. If young people did not follow someone who is at a higher level and they were just influenced by their fellow friends, they would make bad decisions. My cousin's experience is a compelling example of this. When he was freshman at high school, he became extremely close with some shady people, he did not focus on his studies and he did not accept his parents' advice. Consequently, he abandoned high school and he is now unemployed with a few job prospects. Thus, teachers can be great role-model to follow and help young people to have a successful life.
Second, people who are at a higher level have more experience and they can teach you a lot of new things. For instance, if I had not had a teacher who patiently explained physics to me, I could never have developed a passion for this subject and an interest in nature's laws. Learning from older people improves your knowledge and broaden your horizons. I would never have decided to study mechanical engineering in Turin if my mathematics teacher had not talked to me about the prestigious Polytechnic University of Turin. In my opinion, you cannot learn a lot from your fellow students since they do not have more experience than you, they are at your same level and thus they have the same worries and problems as you in their lives.
All in all, this essay discussed why people should learn from someone who is at a higher level. This is because they give you some important advice for your life and they can be taken as excellent role-model, and because they improve your knowledge and increase your expertise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 59, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...ing who people's best teachers are have been ongoing in the recent years, espec...
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Line 1, column 372, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...o-workers and friends make people learn better, others believe that learning from teac...
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Line 1, column 559, Rule ID: FELLOW_CLASSMATE[1]
Message: Use simply 'colleagues'.
Suggestion: colleagues
...tise better from older people than from fellow colleagues. I feel this way for two reasons, which...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, if, second, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91304347826 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56263074433 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496567505721 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4611587218 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.35 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260386341854 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862077040054 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759007175108 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167265062951 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592782158932 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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