People in society work in many different settings, and for a variety of reasons. What do you think is the main reason why people have jobs?
to feel happier about their lives
to save money for the future
to develop new skills
Use specific examples and details to support your answer.
Having a career in a person life is very crucial which means mostly people have job for a plent of reasons. In my opinion, the main reason that why people have jobs is because it makes them feel happier about their life. I feel this way for the following resaons which I will explore in the following essay.
In the begining, having a career is very crucial for an individual life as it provides a purpose of life. People who have a goal in their life are more happier and satified in their life which gives them a sense of mental well beign. To achieve their goal they do jobs that gives them a direction and a step in their life to reach their destination. However, people feel dirctionless without having a career and they are more depressed in their life. My own experience is compelling example of this. After completing my studies I was worried what should I do with my life. Then my friend sugessted me to pursue a career in my field of study. Therefore, I started to work at the health care organization. I felt very much contented after starting to work their because I then know that I wanted to serve people by staying in the profession. I have a goal to serve humanity by providing them good healthcare. Consequently, my life was very much happier and satisfied.
In addition, people feel happy at work because they meet new people every day which means they learn something new. Human is a social animal and it needs a sense of social well being which comes along with the career. However, people who stay at home they easily get bored because they have same old people to meet in their life. At work when we meet new people we always experience a new day in ou life. To exemplify, when I worked at the hospital I used to meet a plethora of people from which I learned many things. These experiences were the best day of my life and always helped me whenever I stuck in any situation such as there was a colleague at my work place she was very confident and hardworking. After working with her for many years I also developed these skills in my personality. Therefore, having a job is very beneficial and it makes life more happier.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that people go to work to feel happier about their life. This is because, it gives a sense of mental well being, and because it gives new experience which brings positive change in our personality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
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Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
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...perience is compelling example of this. After completing my studies I was worried wha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48965517241 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49595683097 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432183908046 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.220291434 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.375 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.125 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270879023827 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909111430879 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723405057307 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193599801172 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615191935514 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.47 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.03 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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