People spend too much money on their pets even though there can be other good ways to spend money. Give details and examples to support your response
Nowadays, due to developments in technologies and the economy, many people can get more income before in the past, which allows them to spend surplus money on other things, such as hobbies, travel. A lot of people often use money to acquire pets. Some people think that it is better for people to spend money on other things than purchasing pets. However, consuming pets or their items is not a waste of money because people can relieve their stress, grow their social skills, and be helped many things by pets.
First of all, people can get rid of their stress by taming pets. People today are under a lot of stress and pressure due to this competitive society. Also, currently, young people today live alone, so, most of them often feel loneliness. By domesticating pets, since they have one more family member, they can liberate from the feeling, and while training their pets, they disregard their works and enjoy the moment, so, when they return to work more efficiently. One study which experimented about the possibility of what pets help people diminish their stress shows that pets can aid people to unwind about their works and moderate feeling loneliness. The researcher explained that groups of people who live with people tend to increase dopamine, known as the happiness hormone.
Also, people can improve their social skills by interacting with their pets. What this means is that to discipline their pets, people have to spend time and interact with their pets. Therefore, if people are introvert, they can fix their habits when meeting other people, they feel shy about talking. For example, in my case, when I was in elementary school, I had not been able to communicate with other people due to my innate characteristics. However, one day, my parents recommend me to tame pets for solving my communication problems. At first, it was hard for me to train my dog, but time as went by, I grew accustomed to training it, which helps me to learn how to interact with other people. After a few years, it could be easy to contact other people.
In conclusion, investment in pets is conducive for enhancing the quality of people’s life. This is because people can reduce their stress because when domesticating their pets, people can take their minds off about their works and relaxing their mind from feeling lonely. Also, they can learn communication skills by disciplining their pets.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2000.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90196078431 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52238631422 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495098039216 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1945216134 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259368221697 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978738444933 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604865494647 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191850980718 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0751544799088 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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