People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do.
Some people might insist that people living these days spend excessive time for their enjoyment rather than their works that they have to do. For example, we can easily find those who watch movies or video clips through Netflix and YouTube almost anywhere (i.e. subways, works, and schools). However, I do not agree with the statement; instead, people today spend much more time on what they should do.
Firstly, with the development of technologies, the working hours have been increasing. Before computers and the internet had been widely used, in order to work, workers had to be physically at work. However, in these days, the majority of people own their personal laptops (or computers), and the internet is accessible even in subways. Although it has brought us countless benefits, it has extended the real working hours, which means the entire engaged time for work not only in the office but also at home. For example, when there is an urgent project, workers keep working with their laptops at night or even during weekends at their places. It shows that people today work more than ever, convincing that the given statement is false.
Secondly, although people might be seen as they are entertaining with their smartphones or tablet PCs, many of them are actually studying. With the advent of easy-to-carry media such as smartphones and tablet PCs, many internet-based educational programs have been developed. It allowed us to access study materials even during the time that has been considered as improper to study. For example, in a subway, it is easy to find students who are watching a lecture, in order to make their commute time more useful. Thus, it demonstrates that how people living these days spend their time for what they have to do rather than for their personal enjoyment.
It is disputable whether people today excessively spend their time entertaining themselves rather than for their have-to works. However, I think the given statement is not agreeable with the consideration of two points mentioned in this article.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06804733728 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57753951553 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532544378698 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.8895907093 48.9658058833 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.0625 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.125 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239691759003 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0910337268746 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136375069466 0.0737576698707 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177867468485 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137261608548 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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