People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do—rather than doing things they should do.
Everyone has different purpose of earning, some earn to fulfill their basic needs, some to live luxurious life and various purpose similar to this, If we focus on recent vogue, people are more into enjoying things and they spend their money on things they like to do rather than they should do.
To begin with, we can see that now days it is very easy to get a decent job and to complete need of individual. Also now days people live alone from family, don't get married, so they don't have responsibilities of anyone and have to invest all money on themselves. This culture is very common now days and so people chooses a job which give them sufficient amount to complete their basic needs. People are so obsessed with all the dream fulfillment concept, where they consider job as secondary and earn money on to pursue their dream. Sometimes the dreams are worth investing but it lead to a wrong direction when people have dreams that only waste money and harm to self. For example, if a person earn decent money which are required to complete their degree and make house or whatever genuine things but as the person is thinking of short term enjoyment they invest money on parties, throw party every night, travel same place frequently, enjoying luxurious things which are not required for now, so this perhaps people are doing these days. In such situation they are just wasting money on transient things. I feel its necessary to enjoy every phases of life but remember the consequences of wrong enjoyment.
To carry on this further, people sometime so lost on all these things, make these enjoyment priorities that they have to heed that in future. We know that everything comes with time and stays for a time. Youngsters sometime forget that they will get older soon and feel like their life will remain same. If they consume all money on today and left with no money for future than that would lead to future livelihood problem. When we get older our body not have the same potential as we have today and we won't able to work effectively and earn less money. So by considering above statement I feel it is absolutely necessary to use money on the required things. People so early forget about the insurance, buying house, cars , investing on properties, savings. I feel these are essential to do in younger life to secure future but those who are too busy on temporary enjoyment don't understand the need of all these things, they only understand when they face difficulties in future.
I have seen people wasting money on not required things and also seen them in worst condition in their old age, and its lesson for this young generation that we should use money wisely, extravagant and unplanned use of money can only make us suffer in future. I feel when we use money via a proper planning we can enjoy today and also can enjoy things in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n enjoy today and also can enjoy things in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, for example, i feel, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2356.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66534653465 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35807772357 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459405940594 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.0 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.5315717163 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5789473684 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21052631579 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276612799766 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0809278484195 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.096657742226 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209542883728 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125304694186 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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