People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons
that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples
and details to support your answer.
People work for gaining personal experience and to fulfill their hobby. I will develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, one of the reasons for my specific thought is that people work to gain new experience and use this experience in their future life. Because, some type of work is not same in practically, how it looks in theoretical. Side by side by doing work and taking experience people can decide as they continue their work. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I remember when I completed my graduation I decided to become a teacher because I was lazy. In America, public school teachers get a lot of holidays. Actually, public school teachers only work 180 days out of the year. It seemed like a great, stable job with a lot of benefits and vacations. However, when I stepped into the classroom on my first day, all that changed. My first class was huge and filled with students from different economic, social, and cultural backgrounds. It was such a challenge to manage the lesson and their behavior at the same time. I was exhausted after conducting just one class for forty minutes. And besides the teaching, I also had to prepare every lesson which took three times as long as the class itself. I finally understood that how something looks on paper is much different than the reality. From that point on, I have remained careful about romanticizing things I have never directly experienced. So for taking experience and taking decision about the work is one of the cardinal causes for working.
Secondly, why I illustrate my specific thought is that to fulfill their hobby and know about strength and weakness people also work. Because if a person want to be something which not provide money , the person only do it for their passion. Doing anything for hobby or for the passion or for knowing about ourself is very common. My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. I always wanted to write a book. After graduation from college, I thought I would write an indispensable piece of literature that would live on forever. However, after years of writing, I finally figured out that I was not very good at it. But I continued to read, write and study. I tried to write a screenplay and when that failed I tried to write a TV show. After all those failures due to some reasons, I still felt the urge to write. A few years ago, I started teaching Toefl and discovered that I had learned some interesting information, which I can use in a new and unique way. After years of writing and failing, I finally completed a book that I could be proud of. But more importantly, I learned about my strength, weakness, and direction those I wanted to take in my life. If I had not performed that type of continuous hard work I would have never learned about my aim in life and the way of achieving it. So it is clear to see people work for knowing himself and to fulfill their hobby.
To sum up, from the light of above reasons I strongly believe that people work for their hobby and to gain experience from a new things.
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...hobby and to gain experience from a new things
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, finally, first, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, after all, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 559.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50626118068 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53048337743 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434704830054 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 559.0 20.1344086022 2776% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2519.0 100.406767564 2509% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 559.0 20.6045352989 2713% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 129.0 5.45110844103 2366% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193874373687 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193874373687 0.076458572812 254% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133221652404 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0240269011602 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 279.3 11.7677419355 2373% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -478.99 58.1214874552 -824% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 218.9 10.1575268817 2155% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.36 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 33.82 8.01818996416 422% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 10.002688172 530% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 225.6 10.0537634409 2244% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 219.0 10.247311828 2137% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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