. People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your reasons.
People work to fulfill their wishes and support their families. It is absolutely correct that the majority of us work to earn money to survive in this world. To live a peaceful life one should have sufficient savings in our bank account. Nowadays, as the price of resources is increasing day by day, I believe that people are working only to get a salary so that they can afford a proper meal each day. Apart from this, there can be many other reasons why humans put effort to work daily. I will explain this in the following passage.
Apart from a big population, there are some people who want to make their name in society. Some people are born into wealthy families, but, believe in creating their own life. Thus, they work hard and make their own path even though there are many good opportunities available at their home. For instance, take the example of popular Hollywood singers such as Taylor Swift, Ariana Grande, and Miley Cyrus. Similarly, in Bollywood, there are many celebrities' sons and daughters who put effort to make their own name in the film industry with their own hard work. This shows that people do not work only to earn money but to prove to themselves that there are worth enough and can achieve success with their own hard work even though there are born with good fortune.
Furthermore, some people work because they are passionate about their dream. For instance, when prospective engineering students graduate from college, they dream to work in a particular field. The sector of their own choice. They work hard and try to reach their destination where they work because it is their passion. It was their dream to be in such a company or position. Actually, their motive is not to earn money but to reach their goal, and they feel happy to continue in it. Take an example of an Indian student, who is preparing for the UPSC civil service exam. A student works hard to become a public officer after passing the exam so that they can serve the nation. They work to help the people and society of their own country. Therefore, I can say that some people work to accomplish their goals.
In conclusion, I would like to say that there can be many different reasons why a person wants to work. According to me, either they want to make their own name in society or work in the field in which they are passionate
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, if, similarly, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60143198091 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30933037073 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486873508353 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5231178742 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3333333333 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4583333333 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264703706888 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0898127537177 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062864024735 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180831310962 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421825012536 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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