Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree with the statement that young people nowadays are better able to make decisions about their own lives on their own rather than relying on their parents.
To begin, young people now are better at critical as well as independent thinking, and tend to value individualism more than collectivism. Now schools are endeavored in cultivating students the ability to think independently and criticize the authority. On the contrary, back to the mid 20th century when the World War Second went on, the government as well as those educational institutions tried hard to cultivate patriotism among the youngsters and told them to not question the authority including their parents. The natual result is that this generation are mostly depended on their parents to make decisions for them.
In addition, with the rise of emerging media, young people now have more access to information and are better able to make more concise decisions. After the popularity of world wide web in the beginning of the 21st century, there are increasingly different types of social media like Twitter, question and answer websites like Quora, as well as popular science websites like Quartz popping up. By searching information or asking related questions on those websites, they can draw a more comprehensive picture of a certain thing related to their career plan. According to the Aimei, a think tank in China, there are more than 1000 questions asking for guidance of which major to pick in the university and more than 2000 replies in Zhihu, the China's version of Quora.
However, I have to admit that there is also a backside of the rise of social media. Many social media use algorithm to provide customerized content for users, but audience may thus be trapped in an echo chamber where they cannot hear different voices but can only hear very similar voices to them. Young people, therefore, may become more and more extreme and conservative, and thus cannot make insightful decisions, and have to rely on their parents to make decisions for them.
In a nutshell, with more acquired information and critical thinking, young people now can be better able to make wise decisions by themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 583, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 361.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06648199446 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69390546112 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529085872576 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.725836196 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.692307692 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7692307692 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351602048803 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134560116206 0.076458572812 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143775017615 0.0737576698707 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243267718542 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137327793769 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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