Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children
(aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Television advertisements have a very deep impact on people and especially on children, who do not understand the wider meaning of many advertisements since they are young and naïve. Children lack the understanding and knowledge required to distinguish between good and bad. As an adult we have developed and learned the difference between what is right and what isn’t. However, the same understanding has to be given to the young generation so that they are able to differentiate between good and bad. Therefore, it is necessary to understand the extent of television advertisements that are broadcasted especially when it comes to the younger population.
Inculcating values that help the young generation shape their future is important. Any advertisement promoting deleterious products or disturbing actions could have a very negative impact towards the young population. Advertisements like promoting drugs use, violence and other illicit activities should not be encouraged. Instead advertising about the importance of social values, promoting ethical work or scientific programs would help them shape their future accordingly.
As a child everybody had a liking to sit in front of the television watching favorite shows and programs, even as an adult we still enjoy the company of television series. Children have an inclination to be influenced more by television shows than anybody else. Advertising and broadcasting programs that create adverse effects on the minds of young generation should be immediately discarded. Educating values that guide them in becoming a better citizen should be promoted.
In conclusion, television advertisements directed towards young children should not be allowed. It is pivotal to understand the extent of such advertisements since they might a have a very negative impact on the younger population.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Instead,
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ative impact on the younger population.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, however, if, so, still, therefore, as to, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 280.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64285714286 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25024331899 2.67179642975 122% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528571428571 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1837778322 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.333333333 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214375340835 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833535716453 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800348240783 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145617462731 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390145224324 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 10.9000537634 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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