Question: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Societies are constantly evolving. Values and perspectives change through time. In order to make sure the harmony and well-being of people, societies set rules that ought to be followed by everyone. Some people say that today rules are too strict, especially towards young people, while others disagree and feel that rules are necessary. Personally, I am in favour with the later opinion. Rules help to protect young people and discourage them from engaging in unethical and dishonest behaviour.
To begin with, rigorous rules ensure the overall safety of mankind. Society makes rules in order to protect the well-being of young people and discourage of following dangerous behaviour. For instance, in my country the legal age of drinking and driving is 18 years old. In order to prevent youngsters to commit in harmful behaviour before they are fully able to make decisions, our society forbids them to get easy access to addictive susbtances such as alcohol and dangerous activities like driving. If there were no restrinctions on the consumption of alcoholic beverages, young people who have not yet fully developed a sense of responsibility would get into risky activities that are harmful both for themselves and people around them. Strict rules prevent teenagers and young adults to engage in dangerous behaviour.
Secondly, rules help youngsters to learn about values and morals. Restrictions ensure that people understand and take into consideration the consequences of their actions. For example, societal rules about cheating prevents people from engaging in dishonest behaviour. At school you learn that copying from your classmate or cheating in an exam has severe consequences such as getting detention or a reprimand. If society does not discourage these behaviours, then young people would grow up thinking that they do not have to think about the impact of their actions. If behaviour that goes against society´s values is not punished, then the world be chaotic. Rules make people understand since young age that some behaviour is acceptable. Without rules, harmony among large groups of human beings would not be possible. Being strict with youngsters help them to become more obedient once they grow up and have to act as responsible members of society.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that rules upon young people should be strict to ensure their protection. Furthermore, it helps them to get prepared for the real world, where they are expected to behave in a certain way and become noble citizens.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2952853598 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76839239513 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533498759305 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0173504868 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7826086957 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5217391304 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229479493975 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686704283844 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560344527513 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151833461005 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536427294483 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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