Question
Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.
Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these
situations do you think is better?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own
words. Do not use memorized examples.
There is no shortage of opinion on when young adults should seek independence from their parents. The concept of independence differs among young adults; some want it as early as possible whereas some don't rush for it. As a young adult, if I were asked to choose, I would opt for independence from parents as soon as possible. I will justify my choice in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, in my opinion, living on your own is the best way to perceive the real world in its true state without any protection and aid from outsiders. This independence exposes the young adult to the underlying truth of the world and provides experiences to tackle obstacles independently. I must admit my opinion is based on my personal experience. After leaving my parents' house at the age of 16, I started working many part-time jobs to earn my living. It was a tough phase for me but along with this hardship came an opportunity to learn communication and interaction skills. So, I believe I wouldn't have gained confidence in interacting with people if I had lived a pampered life with my parents for a long time.
Furthermore, living independently increases affection among parents and children. Drawing from my own experience, even though I used to live with my parents, we rarely used to have dinner together. But now, we preplan our dinner, and twice a week we meet for dinner either at home or a local restaurant. This gathering is very fruitful for us as we talk about our daily business for an entire week. I have never done communicated at this level when I used to stay with my parents. Thus, I think being independent brings out the underlying affection of a child towards his parents and even contributes to profoundly increasing it.
So, in light of the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe the young adult should seek independence as soon as possible and parents should also motivate their children to live an independent and fulfilling life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
...nt it as early as possible whereas some dont rush for it. As a young adult, if I wer...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...and interaction skills. So, I believe I wouldnt have gained confidence in interacting w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, thus, whereas, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83976261128 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89698448137 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572700296736 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7397755351 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9411764706 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292333285402 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947588703129 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785788848174 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201566742291 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835745596857 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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