the rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict
New era has brought so many changes along with itself and One of the most major changes is the rules that is expected from young people. Although some people might concur that the expected rules in society is way more strict than before, I personally do not agree with them. I believe that the rules for young people to follow are totally straight-forward and I will elaborate on my most outstanding rationales in what follows.
To begin with, I believe todays communities have simplified the expected rules and young people can easily fit themselves in the society by adjusting themselves to handful of simple rules. What mostly expected from youngsters includes subjects such as not disrespecting elderlies, not doing drugs or not causing harm to others. Nonetheless, the observations depict a contradictory result. Despite this simplified expectations, prisons are increasingly confronting with more young people entering them. This fact must make us understand that there is something wrong with these rules and probably societies must be much more strict one the rules expected from youngsters. Therefore i beleive not only the rules aren't strict, but also they lack strictness.
One way to measure intensity of a phenomenon is to compare it with its intensity in the past. By comparing strictness of rules in today's era with the past, lack of strict rules is obvious even by having a superficial compare. For instance, considering the importance of respect to elderly, today's youngster are far more rude than youngsters in the past. As an example, the respect that i have for my parents is relatively higher than my little brother ( 8 years younger), similarly the respect that my parents have for their parents are even higher than the respect that i have for themselves. Accordingly, we can observe the gradual decline of respect in generations and this decline is due to lack of strict rules in societies.
To cut the long story short, I do not think that the rules in today's era is strict. In my idea these rules are too fragile and they are being ignored comparing to past. I strongly believe that by implementing stricter rules, we can prevent our youngsters from having troubles such as going to jail as well as having a better society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, if, nonetheless, similarly, so, therefore, well, for instance, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97347480106 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79025425172 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501326259947 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8786006589 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.294117647 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341661344753 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110013407018 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085611534428 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213756910521 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921650670626 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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