The rules that today s societies expect young people to follow and obey are too strict

Rules are various regulations which societies established to maintain a normal, safe and fair place for people and avoid unwanted or harmful behaviors and results. Though rules are good for society in many ways, too much or rigorous standards definitely do harm too. Today, the world is changing so rapidly, young generations are suffering from all kinds pressures partly because of a wide range of strict rules that they need to follow. So needless to say that the rules today are too stringent for young to obey.

The societies expect even force the young to focus on study too much. Many countries today have kids started student career in preschools to learn and prepare for primary education about 3 to 4. Even at such a young age, they have to get up around 6am, have breakfast in a hurry, then reach their classroom as soon as possible. A busy day just begins. This is especially true in China. Moreover, parents tend to register all kinds of classes for the kids, like dance, piano, Martial art, painting, even AI. Children are put into extra subjects’ classrooms as well, such as, English, math, in order to improve their academic performance in school. They have to sacrifice most of their freedom to relax and entertain. All these rigorous expectations basically lead to one direction: a successful future in career and life.

The societies expect young adults to follow certain paths or traditions like previous generations. Firstly, if a woman doesnt want to give birth, no matter how successful she is and what a great life she is living, people would judge her that she is irresponsible for the society or her life is a failure. This ridiculous judgement just happened not a long ago to famous Chinese dancer, Yang Liping, who is 60 and has been remaining to have no baby. What’s more? Take me for example, my parents are very traditional that my future husband should only 3 years older than me, which also for a modern woman is too strict to comply with.

To conclude, societies need rules, regulations, values and laws, but some rules and expectations are just too strict and are unnecessary pressures for the youngster, especially when it comes to children’s study and adults’ lifestyle and paths.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 120, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...evious generations. Firstly, if a woman doesnt want to give birth, no matter how succe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, well, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89973614776 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62465750265 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612137203166 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6970189542 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.166666667 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27777777778 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366297347111 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952211867558 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106788003957 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217047002515 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117679690894 0.0645574589148 182% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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