Some companies provide important products or service, but also damage environment. Some people believe that government should require more penalty, higher tax and larger fine of these companies, while others believe there are better ways. Which do you prefer?
Without a doubt, human activity has harmed the environment in every aspect, and now ripe time to compensate for this issue. From my perspective, the government should do something to prevent companies from damaging the environment right away. There are numerous reasons to support my opinion, among which two stand out.
First and foremost, the government is the most powerful organization in the world, and they have enough power to prevent companies from harming the environment. To be more specific, after the industrial revolution, the government has started to exploit environment to produce more goods. In this way, they caused deleterious effects on the environment, which, in turn, have made different problems in human life. However, now is the time to listen to nature and do something immediately to clear up the environment. In addition, because of the great taxes that the government obtains from the companies and their craving for income, the government is reluctant to enact a rule to force companies to stop harming the environment. As a result, if the government passes legislation and penalizes companies that damage the environment, they will have a clean environment, so people could breathe fresh air full of oxygen and eat more healthy food by which the city has more healthy people. In this way, they could reduce the burden expense on the health care system.
Second, when requiring more penalties and a larger fine, the government can encourage corporations to use environmentally-friendly facilities. Clearly, the companies do not want to be penalized by the government and pay them money because it reduces their income. So this rule and fines act as an incentive for factories to upgrade their tools and machines and use modern devices that do not produce pollution and do not harm the environment. As a result, not only the new factories that want to be built, but also the old factories must be environmentally friendly, and they must be motivated to do so.
To sum up, considering the reasons and the examples mentioned above, I believe that the government should do something immediately and force the companies not to damage the environment. This is because not only is it a serious matter, and the government is the only organization that has authority to do something about it, but it would also help the companies become aware and use an environmentally friendly procedure to produce their yields.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.0752688172 334% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13032581454 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06094361603 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486215538847 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7133596045 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.9375 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9375 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237140397996 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832850515088 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540207424471 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1485832486 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210080734155 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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