In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your'opinion by using specific reasons and details
Many people argue that teenagers should not be involved in job while studying and some think in the opposite way. Actually, it is a heated debate nowadays. As far as I believe, pursuing Job is always advantageous in many aspects which I will explore in this essay.
The first and foremost reason is “ making more responsible and mature”. I will put a very good example of one of my friends. We used to study together in high school and everyone used to complain that her nature is very childish and impatient and somehow she needs to learn to be more sensible and mature. Afterward, she started working in a university cafeteria. She stared understanding her responsibilities. Her parents were also very happy that finally, her girls are now a patient and more mature. These qualities help her in myriad ways such as study and social interaction. There I want to convey that “job “ shapes your personality and makes you a better person.
My second point is “ freedom”. Everyone wants a bit of freedom on their own and doing job provides you that. For example, when I was in class 10th, I wanted to buy many fancy earrings and bracelets for me, I was very passionate about fine jewelry, however, my parents were against buying such stuff because they used to believe that it is a waste of money. A few years later, I joined a job in my college and when I got the first salary that was a special day for me. Thereafter, I bought so many antique accessories for me. I got full freedom to fulfill my small dreams. Moreover, working in a library made me a more confident and studious student. As a result, I got very good grades in my exams and as well as I got referred by one of my co-workers for a very reputed company, where I am working as a research assistant now.
In conclusion, there are different facets of doing the job in teenage but according to me, I developed many important skills through that job which helped me immensely in my future in various ways. Beside this, working makes anyone stronger, more confident and responsible thus a better person. Hence, I am overall full convinced that doing a job is always better at any age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64690721649 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70626411275 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548969072165 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.4957349154 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.9545454545 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.18181818182 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137638299507 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365858590969 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429632051417 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931095875138 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035324124922 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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