Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
No one can deny there are both positive and negative aspects of offer money for each high grade to school-age children. In this regard, people's opinions are divided as to whether it is a good approach for training kids or not. It is my firm belief that parents should offer encouragement and money for any effort they get in school. For a number of reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
My primary reason is that offering money by parents is a critical key to motivate students toward better performance. With expecting prizes for any hard trying, kids spend more time and concentration on their homework and tasks. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. You see, my nephew didn' t has enough motivation for doing his homework, but when his parents make a plan like reward him, he tempted to work hard enough for better grades in school. So, encourage children by provide prizes or something eatable play an increasingly role in higher proficiency in school compared with other children.
Second, giving some money to kids after high marks learn them responsibility. Most children can not understand this issue without any money or gift. Children can know during this approach if their money rises down the only one is responsible for this event is him or herself. Statistically, 70 percent of students between 7 to12 age that expose to encouragement for any effort in their life are more accountable in their tasks at school or home. As a result, this procedure plays a role in the improvement of children's personalities.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that giving money is so effective. Not only because of stimulus kids toward trying hard but also help parents for better training.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...is regard, peoples opinions are divided as to whether it is a good approach for training kids...
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Message: You used an adverb ('increasingly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('role') instead of another adjective.
...rovide prizes or something eatable play an increasingly role in higher proficiency in school compare...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, as to, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92182410423 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80489127042 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605863192182 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5337927549 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4375 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8125 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37337000305 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111684733363 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684716357694 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214639001329 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110740116918 0.0645574589148 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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