Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?
Throughout history successfully and be a useful person has played a prominent role for everyone’s life and it has been important for people to have smart and hard workers children to be proud of them. So they try to motivate their children to be the best one during the study. In this regard some parents give their school-age children money for each high grade they get that from my own perspective it is a good idea that in the following paragraph I will elaborate on my viewpoint on this matter.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that children are in a competition in school by other student and this is very necessary to have incentives for studying and get higher grad in class and parents are too effective in this way because they like their children and it will cause to be happy when they see they are promoting. As an example when I was a child and I had a mathematic exam in school my mother promised me to give some money for buying a bicycle that I was dreaming about. Consequently I tried hard and stay awake during nights to rich my goal. By this work I arrived to two purpose in the same time. I could get a good grad and have a bicycle that I liked very much. But In contrast to my friend that her parents did not do anything like this could enhance my grad more made me happy.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that parents can use from this method to decrease costs of family because sometimes children insist to buy something that is too expensive and it is impossible for parents to pay that money so they can tell their child if he gets a high grad in the class they will do that for him and if he failed they should not purchase it. And save money for another requirement or spend that for necessary demands of the child. For instance some years ago needed sport shoes for playing football but he wanted to have a play station device that had much costs so my father gave courage him to try in his study and be the first grad in his class to give him money for that device but my brother did not do that and my father paid for his shoes instead of that.
From what has been discussed above we can safely reach the conclusion that giving money for getting high grade to children is a way to make them happy and more successful. However it will have some financial advantages for families to invest on other problems in their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...ng a bicycle that I was dreaming about. Consequently I tried hard and stay awake during nigh...
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Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... to have a play station device that had much costs so my father gave courage him to ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...to make them happy and more successful. However it will have some financial advantages ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, so, for instance, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.33705357143 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33536232979 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470982142857 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.383096077 48.9658058833 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 138.785714286 100.406767564 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385956740817 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133356570686 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115797116527 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253641687062 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739396859301 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.48 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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