Some parent offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
All the parents want their children to become successful in the future, and they believe that the best way is educating with high ranking grades. They try to encourage their children to be eager about learning. One way that they assume is great for this is comprising them with money for every high grade they get. But, I believe it's not a proper decision not only for children but also for parents. There are many reasons that it isn't the right choice for children, two of them, which have great importance, describe hereunder.
First of all, after some time students start to learn that if they receive the money, they should learn and they study only for receiving comprises and not to learn more and be wiser. After a while, if you don' give them their prize, they put pressure on you by not studying, failing and playing too much to get money. There is a lot of researches about the harm of encourage children with comprises. Psychologists suggest that instead of prizes, we should teach them how to manage their demands to be successful. I remember my brother when he was a child; he had no tendency to attend school and study. He screamed and shouted and resisted to studying, my parents wanted to encourage him with prizes, but after talking with the consul of the school, He recommended to combine learning with the activity he liked at that time, and it worked, and he became enthusiastic about learning more and more.
Moreover, in the future, they expect to gain money for every little success they achieve, and they won't work to improve. In adulthood, you will be comprised only for great works, and no one gives you a prize for learning new skills for your career. For instance, if you want to keep your job in my field, you should learn the newest software and topics even if you don't like them, and it is your duty, and no one will give you extra money for this. You will have a lot of competitors that want to get your job.
To sum up, one way parents encourage their children to get high grades is to comprise them. I definitely disagree with this claim, because children will think they learn only for money and also it has a bad effect on their future and their career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: it's; it is
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Suggestion: recommended combining
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Suggestion: don't
... newest software and topics even if you dont like them, and it is your duty, and no ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52141057935 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29292760897 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491183879093 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9559267991 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.588235294 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3529411765 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299338266383 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109210798675 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552433942856 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207137472064 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458240091804 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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