Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Technology Have been evolving rapidly changing and replacing many aspects of our life. It can be seen in the past few years that many technology have been replaced such as recording music, paper book, and many other things. Printed media have also been effect by these rapid development, even though some people still read them. In my opinion, printed media soon will be vanished by the internet news outlets.
Internet news media is more convenient than the printed media. Nowadays, every one can access the internet in most places in the country with either simple fees or free of charge. As a result, people can access to any news source at any time in few second. Moreover, It will be easier for people to use their phone or laptop than to carry multiple new paper or magazine. Due to the convenience of using internet news source, more people are attracted to them and many printed media are losing their subscribers and eventually they will disappear.
People are moving toward the internet news sources because of their flexibility. Some people prefer to check variety of news topics and enhancing their knowledge. Therefore, the internet news will provide them with different option to read from and even different opinion in single topic. However, this flexibility and variety are difficult to be found in one printed newspaper or magazines. Therefore, as the internet sources evolve providing higher flexibility to reader, the printed media will not be able to compete.
As the internet media sources advance, more people will be attracted to them and eventually leading the printed media’s companies to cease production. Convenience, flexibility and variety of internet news source the main reasons that replaces the printed media. As an internet news reader, I, Personally, take comfort in that.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 130, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun technology seems to be countable; consider using: 'many technologies'.
Suggestion: many technologies
... can be seen in the past few years that many technology have been replaced such as recording mu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16216216216 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56674062074 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52027027027 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7401206455 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8823529412 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0792637031459 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0311590826306 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0201699262217 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0531102774728 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236660631087 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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