Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Technology is changing the world. Task or analysis which were impossible to do in the past are now easily can be done using a smartphone. Every day, more and more applications are being developed to make our life better. Thus, surely, smart phones have changed our life the way we live! However, Like another, smartphone has its own pros and cons which I will discuss in my ensuing assay.
Some parents allow their young children to own a smart phone. Every parent is always concern about the safety of their children especially when they are young. Thus, having a smart phone can allow parent to keep in touch with their children. However, smart-phone are not necessary to keep in touch with the children. Parent can allow to use a regular cellphone (without internet option) to reach out to their kids when necessary.
Based on the recent study, it is found that smart phone has long term negative effect when not use in moderation. This is especially detrimental to the young children. Having an internet option, children can download any apps such as game, social networking app etc. Playing game on smart phone constantly can affect concentration of children which is detrimental for their study and upbringing. Networking with stranger on social networking app can also out the safety of children at risk. In addition, having an internet option, children can easily lean towards sexual activities even though they are not mature. And these are only few disadvantages where the list is long. This is reason why country such as France has banned the use of smartphone by children during school.
In conclusion, though smartphone has changed our life significantly, I believe it can cause more harm than benefit to children. Thus, I believe it is fair that some parents forbid young children from owning smart phone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 334, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...uch with the children. Parent can allow to use a regular cellphone without internet op...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1517.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95751633987 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58297519562 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545751633987 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3928115134 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8421052632 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1052631579 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320573256629 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114649590874 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112661870047 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20466863697 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824135787874 0.0645574589148 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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