Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

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Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

Communication is an essential part of our current modern technology. Without it, people will just fail to be updated about the everyday situation of others. Children, on the other hand, don't need such communication in the form of smartphones due to several reasons.

First and foremost, the brains of children are in an immature physiological state, i.e., they keep on forming new neurological networks as they grow up and experience new things. That being said, when you give a child a mobile phone with seemingly unlimited internet access, you are subjecting him to an uncontrollable internet survey that is strife with negative content; thereby, new neural networks would be formed based on these contents, and eventually, that would inevitably have a deep impact on the psychology of the child. For instance, imagine a child who ended up on a website on drugs and how to get hooked up, reading through all the content, engaging in discussions, and ultimately, buying and consuming such drugs. The odds that this child will continue this habit are pretty high. This situation would only perpetuate to the worst.

Another problem associated with open internet access is the game addiction. No one doubts that children are inclined to spend long hours playing games due to the enjoyment they get out of it. But too much of games has noticeable negative consequences. To illustrate this idea further, remember that children are obliged to go to schools and have their education running smoothly including passing exams with high grades, ensuring the most possible success. Spending a lot of time on games, however, would definitely interfere with the educational process of children; because they feel happier while playing, they would feel less eager for studying for an exam.

Last but not least, a potential downfall for children to own smartphones is limited social interaction. No wonder why most children develop onto being isolated and kinda autistic in their behavior; it is mostly due to the curse of the current technology in which children live in some kind of virtual reality.

To sum up, having children to communicate with others does not justify them owing smartphones due to several bad consequences that would outweigh the benefits of having them. In other words, the ends don't justify the means in this case.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
...of others. Children, on the other hand, dont need such communication in the form of ...
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Suggestion: don't
...f having them. In other words, the ends dont justify the means in this case.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, while, for instance, kind of, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1958.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13910761155 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73473180927 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608923884514 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.403887341 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.176470588 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183148056506 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484769999186 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413259002452 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897949459346 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375213715223 0.0645574589148 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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