Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
Technology is growing fater than earler. There are lapotop, TV, smartphoone everywhere. There is no matter man or women,teenagers, small child everyone have access to this technology. But using smartphone at very young age distracting their mind. Personally I believe that parents should avoid to give smartphone in young children. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explore in following essay.
First of all, nowadays technology growing up fastly and it made people lives easier. Additionally technology had made eaiser for people to communicate. Nowadays, everyone have mobile phones for communication. Using smartphone everone have access to internet and people can use multiple application like what's app, facebook,etc. Providing smartphone to teenagers can distracting their mind. Childeren can loose their focuse from their studies.
Secondly, during the lectures instead of focusing on lectures they are busy with their phone to chat with friends, playing games, watching videos. Because of this children will not be able to focus on their studies which affects on their career. It's not teacher's responsibility to keep an eye on each and every student in classroon. Parent should take care of all these things.
I do not agree, that we can keep in touch through only smarphone with internet acees. Parents can give mobile phone without internet access. In case of emergency they can communicate through mobile. Smartphone with Internet access can divert children's mind.Children might begin to loose their social skills if their face it stuck 24/7 to a phone, a tv or a computer.
In conclusion, some parents believe that smartphone function keep in touch with their childern but I am of the opinion that children can keep in touch with their parents through simple cell phone without having internet access. Smartphone is a problem instead of solution. I would propose that they are given a smart phone when they have become responsible people and know that there is a time for everything in life, similar to a rite of passage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23636363636 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78978195909 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569696969697 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.6332475902 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.1304347826 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.347826087 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.17391304348 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26584749296 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698840695627 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736856732478 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160582612564 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846955102634 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.52 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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