Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Motivating young children to contribute to their school tasks has always been a challenge for their parents, especially now that children have access to all types of technology which could distract them. To solve this issue, some parents offer money to their children as a prize for their high grades.
Some people may think that doing so would make children spoil and lazy. However, I believe that that could be a good idea due to number of reasons which I am going to discuss below.
Giving money to the students for studying would actually gives them encourgment to study. The children are mainly too immature to actually understand the value of education and lecturing them about how they can use what they learn in the future would probably have an opposite effect. But knowing that by getting a good grade they would be able to earn something would give them enough motivation to their best. For example, I was rather a lazy student at school, never like to spend time on studying and therefore I had somewhat low grades. In order to encourge me, everytime I got a good grade, my sister used to get me books or the things that I liked. This really gave me motivation to study, and once I did, I realized that I actully like studying.
Also, for geting a good grade at school, students need to work really hard an put their heart into it. By giving them money after achiving a good grade, they would also learn about the value of money. They can also understand that they need to work hard to earn money and also they can learn that hard work would finally pays off.
To address the concern of people who thinks that this would make children lazy, I suggest that parents save the money for them instead of giving them in cash. That way it is also going. to be an investment for their future.
All in all, I believe that giving money to children for keeping them focused on their school is actually a good idea since it can both encourge them and teach them the value of hard work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, however, may, really, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53416149068 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23221077401 2.67179642975 84% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518633540373 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6131806553 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.285714286 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315923428564 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115551782409 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0673440463703 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179624780506 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0465253097648 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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