Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?

Parents have different methods for encouraging their children to be more active and working hard in their education period.
Personally I think that it is a good idea to offer money to children in return for getting high marks in schools.
I feel this way for some reasons which I will explore in the following essay:
First of all, as all we know studying and doing school assignments are boring tasks and children do not enjoy doing such that works. Parents always are looking for different methods to stimulate their children to be more enthusiastic and eager to do their homework and offering money to them is one of them. In my opinion, it’s a practical method and most of the time it works. When children know that they would earn something in return for their effort, they would try harder.
Additionally, besides being keener, children would learn how to set a goal for themselves and how to plan to achieve that goal and learning this skill is very fundamental and advantageous for their future career and personal life.

Furthermore, by this method children could learn how to manage and save their money in order to buy what they like to have. My personal experience is a compelling example of this: When I was an elementary school student, I liked to have a pink bicycle. When I told my parent they said that for each of my good marks they would give me some money and at the end of the year I could be able to buy that bicycle. After that I tried harder and studied more and absolutely I saved all my money instead of spending them to buy candies or tolls because I had a bigger dream and finally when I saved all my money I could afford that pink bicycle and actually further than that bicycle I learned that how to save and manage my money.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that with offering money to children, parents could motivate them to be more active because studying is a boring task and if children be motivated their output would be increased and also children would learn beneficial skills such as how to save and manage their money which is important for their future life.

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Average: 6.8 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich is important for their future life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56842105263 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42396849581 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468421052632 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.2277916657 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.666666667 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 5.45110844103 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364430794129 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151071002159 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985570855926 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193286364525 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10129249835 0.0645574589148 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ich is important for their future life.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56842105263 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42396849581 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468421052632 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.2277916657 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.666666667 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8333333333 5.45110844103 217% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364430794129 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151071002159 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985570855926 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193286364525 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10129249835 0.0645574589148 157% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.82 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.