Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think it is a good idea?
It is hard to deny the fact that academic performance plays an important role in the evaluation of each school-age child. Such a fact leads impressionable people to generate the idea that the money parents give to their children should depend on the scores they get at school. However, such a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. As far as fairness, mental health and effects are concerned, I strongly hold the belief that children's pocket money should not be determined by their grades.
First of all, it is unfair for kids if their pocket money is determined by their scores, as scores are not the only indicator to decide whether a child has a good performance at school. Meanwhile, not every child is born to be a good learner. Some children could not improve their scores even if they have already put a lot of effort on learning, but that does not mean that they could not be a fully developed person in the future. Furthermore, other factor should also be considered, such as participation in extra-curriculum activities, progression made in each subject and observation of school rules.
Second, the fact that money determined by grades harms children both physically and psychologically indicates that parents should not decide the amount of money they give to their children in that way. Take the case of my cousin, a typical school-age student who has an average academic performance among his peers. To encourage him to improve his scores, his parents decided to use mark as an indicator of his pocket money. If he ranks top 10 in his class, he will get 300 yuan as a reward. However, he might lose all the pocket money in the next month if he does not do well. In order not to lose his pocket money, he studied very hard and stop attending any extracurricular activity like playing soccer or watching films. As a result, he suffers from mentally fatigue and physically tiredness, which made him perform even worse in the next exam.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that use score as a indicator could be an effective motivation to the children. Admittedly, pocket money could encourage kids to attach greater importance to their study, to some extent. Ironically, it could also put heavier pressure on kids, since they would spare no effort to getting higher scores and higher ranks. Suffering from too much physical and mental pressure, children might not sleep well at night and pay well attention during class, which might cause negative impacts on their academic performance. Such a negative circulation could even make children lose the motivation of learning. `
In a nutshell, I maintain that parents should not offer their children money according to their scores at school. Admittedly, as my favorite quite from a Chinese old saying goes, the benevolent sees benevolence and the wise sees wisdom, and some people may oppose me. However, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, well, while, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2500.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97017892644 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75537969733 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497017892644 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9802848076 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.695652174 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8695652174 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313148637203 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859259791936 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0785391358299 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178451576927 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047074693034 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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