Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school
Over the past years, the issue of whether or not it is a good idea for parents to offer their school-age children money as a prize for high grades in school has received a great deal of attention from parents and psychologists. Although some may say that children should learn that getting good grade is beneficial for their own, so there is no need for these types of prizes; I, as well as many others, believe that in addition to encouraging children to study harder, offering some money for high marks could enhance the children's mood, and also teaches them some valuable lessons.
First of all, an important reason why it is good to offer young students prizes like money is that it encourage them to study harder. Many psychologists argue that school-age children are not well aware of the benefit and the importance of the education for them, and as they are very young, it is also very hard to clarify the role of education in the life for them. Thus, different prizes like money and toys could intensify their enthusiasm for working hard in the school.
A further reason why it worth to offer money for high marks is that it could enhance the children's mood and make them happier. It is commonly said that children who are happier with their life study and work better in the school rather than the ones who are not in a good mood. On the other hand, many parents mention that when their childs have their own money and could spend in a way they like, they are happier and have a better mood. For example, children could buy the toy they want or spend that money on the entertainment they really like.
Finally, it is occasionally said that offering money as a prize for children's high grades is a good idea because it also teaches them the money management. It is always stated by the experts that if a person learns management and financial issues in the childhood, he or she will have fewer problems when wants to live alone. Therefore, parents could teach these aspects to their children by giving them some money as a prize to their successes in school.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I personally believe that offering money to school-age children for their high grades is a good idea chiefly due to encouraging them to study more and teaching them some precious lessons.
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56658595642 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35397169634 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409200968523 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 413.0 20.1344086022 2051% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1886.0 100.406767564 1878% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 413.0 20.6045352989 2004% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 150.0 5.45110844103 2752% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457426925473 0.236089414692 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.457426925473 0.076458572812 598% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.287945656837 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100949721973 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 206.6 11.7677419355 1756% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -330.8 58.1214874552 -569% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 162.0 10.1575268817 1595% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.71 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.38 8.01818996416 329% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 10.002688172 540% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 167.2 10.0537634409 1663% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 54.0 10.247311828 527% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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